I remember this one being a huge struggle too - tonally, location-wise, Jane's whole thesis statement... just constant rewrites until I had it just so. I've mentioned this before but I love to write stories with the seasons, and this couldn't have been more perfect: the beer garden, the open air feel walking through the indoor bar... summer, baby!
I'd like to give myself credit for NOT FORGETTING to draw the bag of pastries this entire scene! My most egregious error that I generally just don't care enough about is losing characters' bags and accessories. But lo and behold, there it is, on the barstool floor!